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Kind of a mixed bag of every emotions who paints words like he's putting on armor.

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I don't quite know how I feel about this piece. But I do want to elaborate on it. Please review.

Something's always missing

May 19, 2020

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I've come to know myself as all these metaphors for incomplete,
I think that's how we all are as human,
We can be perfect without being complete. 
Something's always missing.

We can look around at others,
Eyes focused on beauty or flaws,
Depending on the viewer,
And there are a few we see as perfect,
And a few we see as incomplete.

Something's always missing.

We can look at happy couples struggling,
And struggling couples happy,
and feel envious,
because even though we want that,
We both are incomplete,

We're missing something.

But she walks in,
With the magical audacity and awkward swagger,
That can only be seen through clumsy teenage eyes,

And suddenly feel like we're not missing something. 
We're missing someone. 


 
Who am I to judge? 

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10 Comments

  • Samina

    Wow, all your pieces are breathtaking and heart touching. <3
    "And suddenly feel like we're not missing something.
    We're missing someone. " loved this line alot.


    9 months ago

  • julia.vasyakin

    the end of this is just....wow. The descriptive language! the twist! the everything!! good job, an amazingly gorgeous piece!! =)


    10 months ago

  • happy butterfly

    That 2nd last stanza.Thats just perfect;)


    10 months ago

  • mia_:)

    Whoa! Breathtaking! The ending literally floored me! :D


    10 months ago

  • Emily Chang

    omg! this was wholesome and bordering on cheesy but THEN! the last two stanzas!! what a twist and I love the descriptive language


    10 months ago

  • Syzygy (#words) (J.A.M)

    Wow! :o
    Such a gorgeous piece!


    10 months ago

  • Dmoral

    "With the magical audacity and awkward swagger, / That can only be seen through clumsy teenage eyes,"
    gosh, i favor these lines too much.


    10 months ago

  • Anne Blackwood

    Ooooh I love the total change in perspective that's so cool this is great


    10 months ago

  • WhispersOfGray

    This is beautiful, Dylan. I don't think I need to say anymore than that. Your pieces are always so beautiful and heartfelt.


    10 months ago

  • journal.scribbles

    This is so sweet and thought provoking at the same time. I love this. In your bio thingy you said you just need 3 words; that's so true but only because you're a super talented writer. "We're missing someone." So good!


    10 months ago