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Message to Readers
constructive criticism and open thoughts are what I'm aiming for
The angst and desire to belong amongst adversity is so powerful.
I wouldn't repeat kids in the second stanza, however this is a minor adjustment to help the flow, not a major flaw at all.
'Familiar love' strikes a strong chord with people that love their families but are growing apart- the conflict between the two ideas is what makes the pain so intense.
The simplicity is cleverly incorporated with the metaphors describe states of mind because often they cannot be captured with contemporary terms.