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Elizabeth Smoke

Canada

Sometimes I write, although there’s not always a purpose for it.

Message to Readers

Honest opinions please! Next I have to write a balled.

An ode to my sweater

September 26, 2018

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Sweater, oh sweater
A lovely gift from some other
Red in colour
But as warm as summer

Sweater, oh sweater 
Perfect for this weather
Soft like a feather
It is also white in colour 

Sweater, oh sweater 
Why do you smell like butter?
Wonder, I wonder 
When did i spill my supper?

Mother, oh mother 
I have ruined my sweater 
It's now a faded colour
And smells like butter 

Round and round in the washer 
It now smells like a flower
No longer the grease of butter 
My beautiful sweater finally smells better 
I know it sounds like i was eating butter for supper but i really wasn't. I wrote this for English class and wanted some feedback :)

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6 Comments
  • The Bubbling Pen

    haha I love it! so adorable and I can totally relate to spilling my supper <3


    7 months ago
  • Araw

    This is such a wholesome poem. I love it.


    11 months ago
  • Kahasai

    "Sweater, oh sweater
    Why do you smell like butter?
    Wonder, I wonder
    When did i spill my supper? "

    I love that part. So true, so innocent, so rhythmic, so funny. :)


    11 months ago
  • Secret Rose

    This poem is quite nice! Maybe you could describe the beauty of the sweater a bit more? Just suggesting!


    11 months ago
  • Onion3102

    This is really cute!


    11 months ago
  • janice

    nice! Poor sweater, though...


    11 months ago