The moonlight
Isn't as bright
In the night.
Shall I tell the moon
to leave behind its pride
Maa, your heart is much much bright.
Ocean's depth
Isn't as large in breadth
Shall I tell the ocean to leave its ego apart
Maa, the deepness is there much much in your heart.
Rainwater forget that you're sound is relaxing
Isn't that exciting,
Maa, your voice is much much soothing.
Whenever I hear it I feel I am breathing,
My heart is always feeling
Almighty has made you make this world a much much better for living.
Footnotes
Word count 96
Date completed 14 April
I want to depict the innocence of the kid who feels that her mother is the best.
Enjambment - Throughout the poem, I have used it.
Maa in Hindi means mother. I thought I should use it.
The innocence of a child is indeed well depicted in this piece. I really loved the way you have used moon, ocean and rain and then made them feel low compared to a mother. Great Job!
12 Comments
WinterBerry
This poetry is truly beautiful! I absolutely think that the idea you wanted to depict was very clear in your poem.
Cheshire Cat
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Anne Blackwood
Replying: Thanks for the feedback!
Anne Blackwood
Replying: Thank you for your support <3
Ezinne Clare
This piece is beautiful
Fernweh
This is truly beautiful!
Well done!
Loser
Oh, this is so beautiful! I love all of the comparisons to nature.
Cheshire Cat
I love how the light in her heart is brighter than the moon
Maya'sTired
This is so sweet!
Ruthh
This is so lovely!
mia_:)
replying: Thank you so much for all your support! <3<3
Tushar Mandhan
The innocence of a child is indeed well depicted in this piece. I really loved the way you have used moon, ocean and rain and then made them feel low compared to a mother. Great Job!