Samina

India

Common girl with uncommon dreams.
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Someone asked me what is unconditional love and I looked towards my mother.

Maa, you are much much better.

May 10, 2020

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The moonlight
Isn't as bright
In the night.
Shall I tell the moon
to leave behind its pride
Maa, your heart is much much bright.
 
Ocean's depth
Isn't as large in breadth
Shall I tell the ocean to leave its ego apart
Maa, the deepness is there much much in your heart.


Rainwater forget that you're sound is relaxing
Isn't that exciting,
Maa, your voice is much much soothing.
Whenever I hear it I feel I am breathing,
My heart is always feeling
Almighty has made you make this world a much much better for living.

 
Word count 96
Date completed 14 April
I want to depict the innocence of the kid who feels that her mother is the best.
Enjambment - Throughout the poem, I have used it.
Maa in Hindi means mother. I thought I should use it.

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12 Comments
  • WinterBerry

    This poetry is truly beautiful! I absolutely think that the idea you wanted to depict was very clear in your poem.


    6 months ago
  • Cheshire Cat

    Q&A answers are up
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/164692/version/324504


    6 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Replying: Thanks for the feedback!


    6 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Replying: Thank you for your support <3


    6 months ago
  • Klaiir

    This piece is beautiful


    6 months ago
  • Frankenstein (previously Fernweh #Queenie's Halloween)

    This is truly beautiful!
    Well done!


    6 months ago
  • Loser

    Oh, this is so beautiful! I love all of the comparisons to nature.


    6 months ago
  • Cheshire Cat

    I love how the light in her heart is brighter than the moon


    7 months ago
  • Maya'sTired

    This is so sweet!


    7 months ago
  • Ruthh

    This is so lovely!


    7 months ago
  • mia_:)

    replying: Thank you so much for all your support! <3<3


    7 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    The innocence of a child is indeed well depicted in this piece. I really loved the way you have used moon, ocean and rain and then made them feel low compared to a mother. Great Job!


    7 months ago