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AHAHAHAHHAHA, breaking out my "classics" XD kidding tho, i am really proud of this piece tho. so thought i'd reshare it the new crowd ;)
I really like the way it's formatted (I'm sure it took quite a long time) as it gives the piece a little bit more of a freshness and newness. All right, these references on Shakespeares's work is quite brilliant; it's not easy drawing inspiration from another's ideas. The metaphors are lovely as they give the piece a certain timelessness. The mentions of (more) modern objects/things are really well intertwined with the main theme circling Juliet. The way the poem is told is desperate and beautiful, which is so lovely to read.
I think the idea of this piece is pretty flawless, brilliant really. However, I did find a few grammatical errors (which is no big deal since they're an easy fix). I actually think that a little bit more imagery could take this to a whole other level as it would bring even more light. Right now it's a bit flat despite the literary devices and descriptions here and there.
This piece was a joy to read. It's so well thought out and crafted, so you should be quite proud. I'm actually reading Romeo and Juliet again right now (for class) so it's great to have been able to read a fresh take on the 'star-crossed lovers' idea. Again, please know that this constructive criticism and that I'm not trying to discourage you or hurt you in any way (I've got to put it out there since I've received nasty responses writers before). Regarding your note on a fellow writer plagiarising: You have every right to be upset. It's not petty to be mad about someone stealing (to be blunt) your work. You've spent hours labouring over these words and she/he/they have no right to simply take the idea. Basically, what I'm trying to say is that I support you and that you should definitely report to WtW for the, to take his/her/their post down.
Once again, I am so, so sorry for the delay on these reviews. This is the second of your three reviews:)