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At the end of this poem, I am left seeing poetry as something so much more complex and important than what we are taught it is in school. There is a new meaning to every poem because of your poem.
You've already used a lot of good techniques in this poem, since many of the lines include a metaphor or other form of figurative language. I'd encourage you to use some more, really unique words and phrases within those metaphors for poetry and maybe some sound techniques (like alliteration), which you already have to some extent. Make it whimsical!
My favorite line is the sixth line, which I highlighted. I really like that line because, to me, it seems so incredibly whimsical, especially with the addition of "a moment of youth".
This is a really good, short poem, and I really enjoyed reading it. I'd encourage you to keep experimenting with cool metaphors and other language techniques. Make it as whimsical as you can! This has a lot of potential!
The entire poem flows really well, and you use some really pretty language within the poem. Good job with the rhyme scheme too. It doesn't seem forced.