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Who binge-watched Buzzfeed Unsolved and has fourteen thumbs? If you see them, do not engage. They are armed and highly dangerous.
The twist was amazing! You do so well at really personifying your characters, and the description is just amazing! I didn't edit much on the dialogue portion because I honestly didn't have much to add. It was really well done, and your characters have such great personalities! Well done!
Some parts I highlighted could be worded better to make the piece flow a bit better, and there were a few grammar mistakes, but overall, this piece is super well written.
Congrats on winning the contest!