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the first sentence looked like something I related with, so I decided to read the rest. The title made it seem as if it was a story about them, which as it turned out it was, but it wasn't the happy ending I expected - it was an interesting twist.
Perhaps more context would be helpful towards understanding the relation between Emilia and Jonathan. Why does Emilia feel so aggressive towards Jonathan, what did he do to her?
Why are they meeting at the hotel - to reconcile, to formally break up? Who initiated the meeting? Why does Emilia not want him to find her when she wants to see his face ("It truly would be wonderful to see your face again, Jonathan") and sending him this letter?
I really like how the snarky personality of Emilia is obvious through her writing, and the way she constantly counters her own words makes her seem like an unreliable narrator, which is pretty interesting since readers will have to decipher her real thoughts.
I liked how the voice of Emilia was strong and consistent throughout the piece! The informal way of writing also helped made me feel closer to her.
Hope my comments were helpful, you don't have to edit according to them if you don't like it. :)