And_The_Stars_Laughed

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and i find spring in the oddest of places

April 6, 2020

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he pressed his cracked fingers to the
crank of the snow-blower, tendrils of
gas curling 'till they were thicker than heavy 
cream.
the apricot-speckled lettering choked its 
excess: pollution clinging to the tree-bark, swimming
through syrup cement. You Do Know That's Hurting The Environment?
Yes, Yes, But We Won't Be Needing It Anymore, Will We?

[sputter-sputter] the metal skewered to its stop, coughing 
as it squirted out one last breath,
dry-heaving chemical-creaked soup 
onto pavement, blue
dripping from the
sky.
even as i stumbled, feet crunching
finally-trimmed grass 
[smog flowing like lava from a
linoleum ribcage] --
the air cuffed my wrists, 
whispering
Spring Is Here.

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5 Comments
  • rainandsonder

    there are so many unbelievably good descriptions here, i could quote every single line! the execution of this piece is flawless!


    5 months ago
  • journal.screams (#Queenie's Halloween)

    This is amazing! All of your poems are amazing! I love how each word is so intentional; they each hit the reader with a clear impact, and contribute to the overall tone of the poem


    6 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    Stunning. Grand. Splendid. Sorry I sound like a dork, but oh well. I simply have to describe your writing exactly how it is.


    6 months ago
  • Loser

    This is a very powerful poem; it begins with the hope of spring, but then twists it so that it is now discussing how humans sometimes destroy the environment.


    7 months ago
  • loveletterstosappho

    the DICTION here oh my god it's so precise and effective


    7 months ago