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This was such a touching piece! I felt so connected to the character and I loved the sarcasm and jokes in between, they really helped in lightening the mood.
Well, I love everything about this story, but since I am reviewing, I feel you could build up Drew and Whitney's relationship a bit more. It seemed kind of fast to me, but again, completely fine this way as well.
Overall, I love this piece- I love the emotions, the descriptions, the sarcasm, the jokes- everything. Great work!