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The usage of 'Dubonnet' in the piece. The fact that the lipstick doesn't belong to the writer evokes curiosity to read on. It's a great hook. The writer continues to make many references to the lipstick and it's colour throughout the letter, and this highlights the betrayal she feels from this evidence of an affair, mostly because it could have alluded to the beauty of the woman.
I feel that you have done an excellent job conveying the anguish and bitterness of the writer towards her husband. Perhaps more context can be given regarding the way they slip apart. Whose fault was it? Maybe the writer doesn't even want to know to spare herself the heartbreak. It's interesting to think around these line and it may bring more depth.
What made the guy fall away? How long have they been married? Will the letter be placed under the red lipstick for impact?
You are an amazing writer. I love the rawness of the letter and the emotional touch that makes the piece sit heavily in my mind. A little bit of tweaking can be done if desired but no matter what it's a strong piece that you should be immensely proud of!
Brilliantly crafted. Keep up the good work! It is a joy reading your piece and I hope you'll do well for the competition.