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Message to Readers
A quick heads up: this is the second part of a longer story that I'm writing - for a bit more context, you might want to read the first one too. You can find it on my page :)
Thanks so much for taking the time to read my work. I'll read and take into account any feedback - any of your thoughts are welcome!
I love how this whole thing is centered around the narrator's interest of what lies behind a door; a small thing, creating a big story. It especially characterizes the narrator.
This is completely optional: you can shorten times where you tell a lot about the narrator and Zoe, and try to add scenes elsewhere that show what the deleted parts told. You might not want to do this though, depending on the style and length of the piece.
Is there an extract three coming soon?