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Your probably deepest and saddest thoughts were represented very well in this piece. As well as the conflict between your issues and the other person's. Now at first it doesn't seem like a delight, until you start to think more about it.
Not really a collection, is it? Anyway I'm left up a little sad as well as confused and curious about the relationship you share. That's mostly a good sign.
Perhaps think of structuring it a little nice apart from that a few touches and it's a very good piece of writing.