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I absolutely love the flow that you have created. The lack of punctuation led me to read the poem in almost one breath, reflecting the first two lines explaining the speaker's breathing and distraught state. Really well done!
I really like the line "Because love's never free." What are the costs? Providing some more detail about this could be interesting.
I really love this poem, I don't say this often. I think you can definitely delve deeper into unique feelings, the emotions presented are very relatable, so adding some unique effects of the situation would enhance it. Nonetheless, the flow, rhyme, word choice, and grammar and punctuation details really come together nicely!