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Peer Review
I liked how different this poem is to the one I reviewed earlier (sorry about the spam doing a review-a-thon to suffer the isolation at home and spreading my paining comments on structure to al.)
What this poem tell is what type of love you are referring to? As a reader its enjoyable so maybe lean into this as it gives your resolve a universal openness to everyone.
Reviewer Comments
What to me would help this poem is some punctuation. You create such drama in text some space would aid it greatly. Music is sound and silence and music is poetry so just a thought.
Rhyme is hard to get right as especially when i use couplets I worry I sound childish but the way you use it here is far from childish it is effectively innocent matching the poem to the T. Well done and kudos.