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Message to Readers
This is a draft of the first chapter of a book that I hope to write. Please let me know what you think, and ways to improve it. Thank you very much :)
I really liked the description in this piece. I liked how you used more than two senses, like a lot of authors do, and included smell as well. You also did really well setting the scene and giving little details about the character without info-dumping. Excellent job; I look forward to reading more!
Mostly, the issues I really had with this were grammar-based. Apart from a few inconsistencies, I thought your writing was very well developed. I am curious as to where this story might lead, as you haven't really set up much of a plot other than the tree. Usually in a story the author might give hints to the plot in the exposition. What's the conflict behind this tree? I'm excited to find out.
Apologies for the amount of grammar edits; I'm a little bit of a grammar snob. Although my review might be perceived as harsh, I really did enjoy reading this! I am really looking forward to chapter two!