silvernight

United States

hey guys, it's ya girl, silver, back at it again...
she/her
14
slytherin
infj
indian-american
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teenage apathy

April 16, 2020

FREE WRITING

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we're
supposed to be studying.

(we're not.) someone
throws
a pencil into a drain. it
cl a t  t  e  r   s
down, taunting. a
reminder. a 
warning,
maybe.

leaves scrape
a dissonant symphony
against the cement, an
unsettling susurra in 
the fragility of this moment.

our shadows lengthen, dusky
liminality when everything else
hovers in uncertainty,
too. our phantom coming-of-age. a brittle
silence— the signal of a generation compliant,
with everything to lose
and no one to care.

the sun edges deeper under the horizon. 

a car alarm
blares, in time with
our dulled pulses. we take notice
seconds too late to be
normal. siri says
fuck you and we laugh,
but it's as mechanical as she is. it rings
bitter, of empty promises
and plastic-painted-silver.

we are the
puppets pushed ahead,
cut from our lifelines. 
and success—

success is not a final we can study for.


 
inspired by a useless study session and the songs "chronosaurus" and "19" (both stray kids).

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10 Comments
  • anoushka1705

    This is so real and beautiful


    23 days ago
  • Anha

    march highlights are live, and you're in them!
    https://bit.ly/34qYVbw


    about 2 months ago
  • thecallister

    Really love the last paragraph! Amazing writing!


    2 months ago
  • Erica Lees-Smith

    I love how this looks and how beautifully you've phrased it!


    2 months ago
  • Charisse Marison

    Love the imagery! I could picture absolutely everything :)
    Thanks for the feedback on my piece, by the way. But isn't life and death black and white???


    3 months ago
  • -writinginhopesofsomeday-

    Wow! I loved your "a brittle/ silence— the signal of a generation compliant," and honestly everything else because I'm definitely feeling it right now :P


    3 months ago
  • timtam.9

    What a beautiful way to describe such an ugly period of time.


    3 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    Well, must say it is relatable!


    3 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    I loved how it started with 'we're supposed to be studying.(we're not.)' Great.


    3 months ago
  • melancholyviolets

    In this, I liked the usage of the spacing during clatters to help the readers hear what it sounds like, I felt this truly captured the loneliness and uncertainty of adolescence, especially in the modern era.


    3 months ago