your freckles are /stardust/ i yearn to make a wish on and blow away
but instead, his grubby hands try to rub them [off] every day.
there's something about the way you laugh-perhaps its the /magic/ behind it,
how it heals and makes me forget the pain;
he doesn't notice it but chuckles at what he calls "you snort".
a thousand different /curiosities/ sparkle in your eyes,
i'd give the whole damn world to you if only you'd tell me about a few,
yet he likes to joke and embarrass you,
so you'll close your eyes as if he'd stop and it'd fade away.
words fall from your /perfect/ lips and i catch them in my hands,
holding on as long as forever will let me;
he drops them so easily, tripping over his own.
my /dreams/ have you in them and they're simple:
you're talking and i'm listening, if only we could do that more often,
only you're picturing him and i know you think of kissing his lips.
stop unknowingly /stealing/ pieces of my broken heart,
you've done enough damage;
but unlike him, i can't blame you for anything (even the small things).
if only you looked at me the way you look at him-god, i wish you were /gay/.
OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH
I read this way back when you published it (the second time) and I was infatuated then, and now I am utterly irrevocably in love with it. The descriptions, the imagery, just everything!!! It's so raw and emotional and longing and yearning and it makes me dream of forever afters and not-happily-ever-afters. And that title is just so enticing, so drawing, so brilliant that it ties the piece together so well. AND THAT LAST SENTENCE --- It is just too GLORIOUS for my bare eyes.
Your word choice and vivid details just make everything so right, and I cannot tell you how amazing this experience was to read it again. Ahh, your writing truly makes me dream.
This is such a relatable piece ahhhh. I absolutely love the poetry and magic in the lines. Why does it seem my days are filled with if onlys? This one definitely deserves more attention!! <3
Oh my god, this is so beautiful! 'your freckles are /stardust/ i yearn to make a wish on and blow away/but instead, his grubby hands try to rub them [off] every day, and 'words fall from your /perfect/ lips and i catch them in my hands,/holding on as long as forever will let me' are my favourite lines.
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Wisp
OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH
I read this way back when you published it (the second time) and I was infatuated then, and now I am utterly irrevocably in love with it. The descriptions, the imagery, just everything!!! It's so raw and emotional and longing and yearning and it makes me dream of forever afters and not-happily-ever-afters. And that title is just so enticing, so drawing, so brilliant that it ties the piece together so well. AND THAT LAST SENTENCE --- It is just too GLORIOUS for my bare eyes.
Your word choice and vivid details just make everything so right, and I cannot tell you how amazing this experience was to read it again. Ahh, your writing truly makes me dream.
Paisley Blue
This is such a relatable piece ahhhh. I absolutely love the poetry and magic in the lines. Why does it seem my days are filled with if onlys? This one definitely deserves more attention!! <3
joella
god, this is so beautiful. keep writing <3
thelostave
This is just so mesmerizing and beautiful!
i'd give the whole damn world to you if only you'd tell me about a few -
That line above expresses the true love that you have. God, this is just so good!
Wicked!
Oh my god, this is so beautiful! 'your freckles are /stardust/ i yearn to make a wish on and blow away/but instead, his grubby hands try to rub them [off] every day, and 'words fall from your /perfect/ lips and i catch them in my hands,/holding on as long as forever will let me' are my favourite lines.
babybluelamentations
god this is beautiful and so heartbreaking ugh I lovee <3
especially the first line about stardust freckles, like yes ma’am
ajamwal
"words fall from your /perfect/ lips and i catch them in my hands," this is the most beautiful line i've heard.