BurningMidnightOil

United Kingdom

currently burning the midnight oil.
she/her | gay

i pop in from time to time. and i may have some new material since it’s now 2021.

Message to Readers

feedback and critiques really tell me what i need to work on and improve! i'm currently mildly unsatisfied with my writing as nothing seems to flow well or sound pleasing to the ear, i'm hoping it'll get better.

my eyes are shut, but you're still there #bemine3

February 15, 2020

FREE WRITING

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i've told you before: i wouldn't love anyone. 
but right now? i can't help but love you with 
your puffed breath and golden tresses
haloing this fragile solipsism.

you're killing me, killing me, killing me, love.

this is nearly farcical, dammit. 
i can't. keep. you. out. of. my. mind.
the sheets are cold beneath my fist,
and the sky is a barrel of spilt wine.

i drink your laughter like it's
the nectar of the gods.
our lives are in tandem, yet
you're farther than i can reach.

you're killing me, killing me, killing me, love.

i want to show you that love
is the wind that kisses your
milk-white skin and is the
amber that drips over your lips.

i'll scratch sgraffito and syzygy 
on my palms and clasp
them over your himalayen eyes.
guess who, i'll ask. (you'll smile)

you're killing me, killing me, killing me, love.

your tears carve my heart into 
tattered tissues, slick brown damaged 
reel of cinema film. my words are 
pancakes, delicious but perishable

cos you've only got eyes for that dark socialite.
Finished: (09/02/2020 10:43PM)

Thank you to @FoxLilly106 for hosting!

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5 Comments
  • babybluelamentations

    damn, this is heart wrenchingly beautiful. I really enjoyed looking up all of the beautiful words in this piece that escaped my vocabulary knowledge haha. every part of this piece feels carefully chosen and it really shows in the beautiful diction and flow of your writing. amazing work <3


    11 months ago
  • Wicked!

    Beautiful imagery! This definitely sounds pleasing to the ear :)


    11 months ago
  • pretzel_time

    Yooooo this is so good! The imagery, the word choice, everything is just *chef's kiss*


    11 months ago
  • Deleted User

    Thanks for the submission! Though it says that it was posted today, I'll let it slide since you told me when you finished it. Good Luck, and may the words be ever in your favor!

    -Foxy


    11 months ago
  • A Rose

    hi! You asked about a wordcount limit. There is none! Thanks so much. Great piece, by the way


    11 months ago