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Well, there were two main ideas that were explored in this concise poem. First, it's the idea that even though we have different origins, our hustle, our strife and our aspirations are still very much the same. Second, I had the impression that what constructs humanity is the things that we go through. And we, as human beings, are made up of stories. An elegant poem, if I could say.
I was wondering what prompted you to write this poem and to arrange it in such an order? It's very effective in conveying how human narrative can boil down to a few essential stories and experiences, which adds a hint of nihilistic elegance to it.
It's a good write, definitely! I shall always be amazed at how you can write this poem within a few minutes and be in awe of how deeply you would have reflected in daily life. I wonder how this piece would look like in an extended piece of writing? :)