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Message to Readers
"the emotion that can break your heart is sometimes the very one that heals it..."
"sometimes it takes a heartbreak to shake us awake and help is see we are worth so much more than we're settling for."
"and you will save yourself", really seals the deal, closing the piece, the pretty bow on top, ressonating with the reader.
Words such as 'pitiful', 'sword', 'save', 'knights', 'innocent', and etc have a sense of 'epic proportions' laid on top of reality, if that makes sense.
Nice piece, very Galentine's day. I agree, be your own hero, no one's going to be there to rescue all the time, great, great piece, thanks for sharing.