Juliana

United States

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Antiochian Orthodox Christian
17
Music major
Former homeschooler
Voice teacher
LOTR
The world, the flesh, and father smith
ESTJ

Message to Readers

So I'm working on a second song. The structure is not definite; I was just trying to organize it a little. I would love any kind of feedback/criticism. FYI, the slashes just mean I have a few options and I didn't know which was best.

But Because You'll Try

January 22, 2020

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Verse 1
Tied/stuck to your sheets again
Fixed feet and nervous/worried/anxious hands
It’s a problem, I know, my dear/It’s a problem, I understand.
 
Verse 2
Empty head, full mouth
Of words you came up without
A single strand of truth.
At least that’s what it is to you.
 
Chorus?
Seize every kind word
Squeeze till you feel.
The thoughts may linger,
But you are more real.
 
Verse 3
Cut every pill in half.
Spill every unfiltered laugh.
Hold nothing but hate back.

Verse 4 (also kinda want this as an ending) 
I kissed your cheek and smiled.
Not because you’re fine,
but because you’ll try. 
 
Maybe the bridge
There is no end
without a doubt.
And you’re not the author, so put the pen down.
 
Maybe a verse
I don’t need empathy
To love unconditionally/freely/completely
But I know a loneliness comes/is caused
With/By the inexperienced ones.
 

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