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I was taken on an emotional rollercoaster throughout this short story.
Maybe include a super quick description of Caleb's face, possibly a visualization of him saying "Sorry, Vicky. I can't do this anymore." when it's repeated. Remember, you know what he looks like, but your reader doesn't. The description of the man who was hit was wonderful, draw on that for inspiration.