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The close-up details of the first few sentences drew me in immediately, especially when we realise at the second sentence that the narrator is so close, yet so far.
I would love to see more of details – what else about him drew in the narrator? I also wondered about the narrator's resolve and why she initially wanted to stick to it – did he have a certain sort of reputation? Did the narrator know him before that day? Was there a certain type of guy she was looking out for? I think you can consider playing with the tense of the piece too: Is this written as an aftermath of the night? Or was she lost in the present and knew the exact moment she became "anyone" as things played out in real time?
I liked how it starts off with one scene, one moment, before we see the many moments of emotional struggle the narrator undergoes through the repetition of the motif "walking away". The turning point of "someone" to "anyone" was carried through the piece and I thought it was interesting that we could compare the walking away imagery! One lingering thought was that I would have liked to know a little bit more detail of what being "someone" means to the narrator, like how we understand what it means to be "anyone" at the end of the piece.
If you ever want to experiment more with writing I would suggest playing with the lengths of the sentences – rhythm can affect the mood of your scenes e.g. the long sentences at the start and the one sentence at the end made me feel a bit breathless as I had to read at quite a fast pace – it felt as though I was the narrator forgetting to breathe as I experienced those moments. Perhaps you can consider mirroring the rhythm of the writing to the pace you want readers to feel about the scene!
Lastly, don't be afraid to spend more words describing what you imagine – the setting, character's physical looks, thoughts, etc. because I liked some of your descriptions (and lowkey wished you went on haha).
Wishing you all the best in your writing endeavours and I hope this helped you! :)