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This is so amazing. Your characters are very well developed, and you portray emotions so well. I liked the unique style of phone calls, and the ending hit really hard.
I noticed that you struggle with commas. Perhaps it was intentional, but your sentences were very long and without punctuation. It would look a lot more professional if you used commas and added pauses in your run-on sentences.
Congrats on winning the contest, and sorry this is a little late