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Message to Readers
wow here's my day today. this is what happened...enjoy
Its gives a timeline of key events that happened today for you without actually having to say it.
I have no questions.
I think your piece has so much potential to be an amazing story. However, you had so many comma and grammar errors in your story. Grammar errors can distract readers from your actual story. I did point out some of the issues, but I know I didn't get all of then.
If you have any questions about your piece, leave a comment. I'll get back to it as soon as I can :)
Keep on writing!