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Wow I had very mized feelings about this but I definetly think it hit home where you intended it to.
Maybe you should use "they" in the entire piece and then at the end say "the they is actually us". Something like that? Then it would make it even more eye-opening and grippy.
- I love the themes you have in here
- Um there was no punctuation so it was a little hard to read but I get it if it is free verse poetry.
- Overall, loved this.