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Feel free to review, but this will make about as much sense to you as it did to me
I really loved the little italic pieces in between the paragraphs, they added a nice flow and rythm to the story that made it very enjoyable to read. I also liked the contrast between the title, it added an element of surprise when I started the story as I expected it to be completely different than what it was (in a good way, I swear). It might have been nice to have a bit more of a link between the title and the piece itself, but you pulled it off nicely either way.
It would be nice to know a little more about the dead dog. How did it die? I was also a little confused by the bit that said that there was dog blood on the mouse’s whiskers. Did the mouse somehow play a role in the dog’s death? If not, what is the connection between the dog and the mouse?
Overall, great job! Other than a few bits that confused me a little, you did an awesome job of weaving together a mysterious and ethereal piece that had great contrast and flow. I loved reading it!