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Message to Readers
This poem is really supposed to represent how someone would feel when they are stressed, or something of that sort. But, even when you're feeling stressed, remember that there is a light at the end of the tunnel, and it's gonna be okay. Thanks for reading!!!::)
I really like the mood of this poem. The rapidity and motion felt fast and breathful, like a roller coaster, but smooth. Idk it was just really good. Is it meant to be read allowed? it seems like it.
I only have two suggestions, 1) break it into stanzas, this will make the flow and read of the poem easier, like separating thoughs and spacing it out, like a transition almost. 2) grammar. You didn't have any periods or commas and I think including those will improve the read of the poem as well. Perhaps this is a personal opinion, but: I understand you probably didn't include stanzas/grammar for aesthetic reasons, but I found it annoying to read without any formatting. While I didn't care for that aspect so much, that's not going to be everyone's opinion. I love the poem, and whatever you choose do to, you're talent with words will shine through.