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Message to Readers
If y'all want some background, there's this guy that spent a lot of time dumping his personal problems on me and then asked me out last year; I very kindly told him no, he was like "cool no big deal." I'm happy, finished freshman year, got through the summer, asked a girl out, she said nah, bounced back, met someone awesome when I got back to school, now we're dating, I'm excited... Fuckboi over here from freshman year science won't leave me alone. Sends messages. Slides into dms. Becomes an all-around creepbag. And I hate it.
So remember kids, no means no. Not maybe, not I'll think about it, not I'll change my mind someday. It's no.
On that delightful note, please comment on what you like/didn't like. I wanted to do a return to sonnets to round out the month, and this was an event I needed to process. :)
The subject matter! I'm a HUGE Shakespeare fan, and I always enjoy reading pieces inspired by Shakespeare on this website.
You have something really good here already, but I feel like this piece could be longer. Talk about more Shakespeare character like- people.
As said before, you have something solid here. You don't have to make it longer, because that is your artistic choice.
I had fun reading this!
I hope you consider writing another Shakespeare-inspired piece!