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The writing! Your style of writing is so delicate and smooth. It's so gorgeous. Your word choice is simply amazing.
I don't think you need to add any more details. It's good as it is.
Formatting wise, I think you could put more sentences out on their own. I think that this piece could be formatted to be a bit less block-y, if you know what I mean.
Great job! I love reading your writing, so this was a treat to read! I wish you luck in all your next writing pursuits! :)