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The concept was all in all adorable. The title really pulled me in.
I really liked the story, it is really good. I really liked how you made it seem like a 'hunt' which pulls the reader in and keeps their attention. Great job! Maybe in your next draft you could incorporate more description in the discovery.
Your writing is concise and straight to the point, which is very good for a short story of this theme.
Most importantly: Please set the scene. Build a setting for your reader to visualize using description and make sure they know when the scene is changing. As much as possible, try and make sure the reader is reading the story you meant to tell. That by reading the story they can see it and understand it just as well as you do.
It was a pleasure reading this story. It's quite honestly the best children's short story I've ever read on this site.