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A few grammar and spelling mistakes. Sorry 'bout that...
What I love about this piece is the descriptive words and imagery. As well as the passionate tone each character exemplifies as the story goes along. The chemistry and strong connection between these two characters was very apparent throughout this entire piece.
When I did finish reading however I was left wondering about Talvi and Emery's relationship. More specifically the background of their relationship and how they got to where they are in this moment. I feel that an expansion of background knowledge would have made their love story all the more heart-warming.
Overall awesome job on this! I absolutely loved it!