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I really liked the story of this piece. It's sadness and plot pulled me and gripped me till the end. Especially with the letter structure and how that plays into that story, that's really creative! I also like all the details sprinkled in about the characters and the location and how that plays into the story. This piece really surprised me and kept me wanting more with all the details and story points. Nice!
I feel like there are a lot of places you can expand on and a lot of details you can use. For example, you can try elaborating more on the relationship between El Flaco and the mother in the past through one of the letters. Also I think describing more on where the setting takes place and how that can affect the story can make it more effective in detail. Also, I'm really interested in hearing more about El Flaco and his backstory, what he's been through and a possible change that occured in his life. This could be mentally and physically too. Also I don't know if this could work, but you can try exploring a different letter addressed to EL Flaco, perhaps from a different character. Also you can try and incorporate an almost torn up letter from El Flaco, indicating that he could've tried to write a letter back but couldn't do so. I think those could be fun concepts to explore. Great job!
I really liked this story and what it was about. The story of El Flaco and his mother as unfortunate events keep on occurring. You do a great job revealing great details, exploring that, and referencing that later on. Really makes the story interconnected, grabbing your attention. Also I really like your grammar usage and how you manipulate the spanish language into the story. I feel like you could expand a lot if you were to flesh it out and explore more details if you wanted to. Really good job with the piece!