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Back in Time

By: Bagel


If I could go back in time, I would go back to February 7, 2018.
Actually, I wouldn't go during the day. I would go during the night.
I would stop the tears, I would stop the pain.
I would give her a hug, for she deserved it.
She needed it.

Then, the next day, February 8, 2018, I would hope she would feel better.
I would hope she didn't cry.
I didn't know that last year would change her.
But it did,
It made her more-
-unlike her.

Peer Review

"It made her more- unlike- her." got me, 'unlike'usually as a negative connotation but it doesn't have to be

Is this a narritive? Are you talking to me? Are you the 'she'?

Reviewer Comments

Thank you for sharing, it says alot in so little <3