Peer Review by L3X∅L∅TL (United States)

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Ocean eyes

By: Eyes Wide Open


FREE WRITING

My eyes are filled with ocean-water;
my voice, the crashing waves, the soothing tide.
I am driftwood fingers and sloping shore,
my hair flows in the wind like dune grasses.
I am fleeting, sea foam dissolving on sand.


Peer Review

The title, 'Ocean eyes', is very luring an beautiful, it reminded me of the Billie Eillish song I've never bothered to listen to XD


Just out of curiousity, are your eyes actually blue? Have you been to a beach that looks exactly like the one you described.


Reviewer Comments

This is the most realistic beach description I've ever read, most are shining waters and white sand.