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"We can uncover the secrets of the universe or stay small"; this sentence shows a caring mother offering a choice for their daughter, something most children need to have. You have created a respectable parental figure who motivates and is willing to stand by their children's ambitions, but also is accepting and understanding to them simply being them. This is a great ideology that parenting should be fixated around, rather than having expectations for children and forcing them to be more or less than what they can be.
I feel inspired by your philosophies to parenting and the maternal instinct. This piece crafts a sense of hope and faith in the future of families and how we educate our children to be able to feel vulnerable and yet secure.
I am curious as to the inspiration behind this piece and to the writing process of it. The structure is something I really admire and the piece, in itself, flows incredibly well because of how organised it is. I would love to know how it was planned out and created!
The piece grants children, as well as us, permission to embrace femininity and to feel strength in weakness. It discusses the beauties in raising children and teaching them how to live healthily in a toxic world as ours.
Your anaphora of "If I were to have a daughter" is super effective and continuously reminds the reader of what your piece is about. I, for one, usually forget the title of what I'm reading midway through so to have it repeatedly mentioned, though in different contexts and with different connotations, enables me to see the greater picture of your writing.
I noticed that sometimes you have full stops at the end of sentences, and sometimes you don't. I'm not sure if this is intentional but you can definitely make it so by experimenting with punctuation to emphasise or link different ideas together! I always encourage writers to play around with punctuation because once we know the rules of how to use it, we should break them and discover new ways to. I only offer suggestions in my reviews to show an interpretation so don't feel like you are inclined to take my feedback on board! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this and the advice I give might be more applicable to future pieces that you may write.
Overall, I am highly impressed and hope that you continue to showcase your writing on this platform as you evidently have so far. Happy writing!