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Based on and inspired by Sarah Kay's 'If I Should Have A Daughter'. This is a first draft, I intend on cleaning it up later. Thank you for reading it.
The line, " "Be Brave," I'd tell her, "be humble, and strong," " is my favourite. I think it is a lovely message to want to give to a daughter.
This piece made me feel very conflicted. Some parts had phrases which made humanity and life look beautiful. But other parts left me with a feeling of despair, and the whole contradiction was quite enjoyable.
I would ask the author how long they had been thinking about what they would teach their daughter, and how they came to the decision that there were certain things that she would need to know.
This was quite a lovely piece. It was a slight bit repetitive in some sections, but it was overall, very enjoyable.