Peer Review by L3X∅L∅TL (United States)

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Glide like a star

By: Lesyeuxrose


FREE WRITING

There's a star in the sky
that shines far brighter than others
it dances with the moon
and glides with the sun
it's not afraid to show
but it's afraid to go
it silently suffered some time ago
it silently overcame some time ago
for this the season to be jolly
for this the season to glide aswell
for we don't know what the future holds
take the opportunity to be the firework
to shine your colours far brighter than others
to engrave yourselves into others life
 to change their lives in a better way
to put a smile on others face
so shine yourselves star
and showcase your talents to the earth
without fear and without hate

-take leaps you would never before for life is a leap of faith


Peer Review

"But it's afraid to go it silently suffered some time ago it silently overcame some time ago", it moved me and I like the repeating of 'some time ago'


Is this a December piece for the next contest, winter themed maybe.


Reviewer Comments

The title drew me in, stars and gliding amuse me.