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Hi, I would love some feedback :)
The first paragraph drew me in and the last on politely showed me out the door, it was anice visit the last part hit me like a ton of bricks.
The surrvivor's guilt and gratefullness really capture the tradgedy of the situation.
I understand the word count crunch, I entered too, 1,000 words really isn't enough but I'd like to hear a detailed story from a victim and what caused the fire, what became off the school aftewr the incident?
The narrator is looking back to November 15th, 1996 at 9:45 am when a huge fire broke out at her school. After the blaze she visits the victims and listen to their stories as well as telling hers at the hospital the 10 are at.
This piece is amazing, I love the time marks and vivid descriptions.
The title's killer, nice concept and portrayal <3