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Here's a poem about death.
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Sort of a sobering reminder that all people die eventually. Maybe hinting that there is a consequence for our choices and what we do in life will affect our eternal existence. Very deep.
Maybe add a little hope at the end instead of all dreary, because even though it is moving in that we cannot escape death, perhaps a feeling that death is not all we have to look forward to will bring a touch of lightness at the end.
I'm impressed a young writer would know about Dante's Inferno! Plus very good use of words in this poem.