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Death's Humble Inn

By: JakeFrommStateFarm


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Death waits for us all,
And patiently he waits,
Fr it is only a matter of time
Before all men enter His gates.

"All hope abandon, ye who enter here,"
He says, "For within ye shall spend all of eternity's years."

"Put away your wails, put away your moans,
"Put away your pleas of mercy.
"For ye have had your chance on earth,
"And now you must live in my country

"Trapped thou art, never to leave."
Disheartened by this news, they crumble to my knees.

They cannot endure this torture.
There must be some escape.
"There is none," says Death,
"Your soul is mine. This Inferno is your place."

"Stuck, thou art, as instruments for my jests.
"And I assure ye, that here, thy souls shall never find rest.

"You've drank the Cup of Death once before,
"And cannot drink of it once again.
"So here you are, damned to this Hell
"As payment for your sin."

"You won't enjoy your stay at Deaths' humble inn.
"For in the game of life, Death is the only one who truly wins."
 

"All hope abandon, ye who enter here," is a a quote from the sign on the Gate of Hell in Dante's Inferno. 

Message to Readers

I haven't published a poem in a while, so this piece is a little overdue.
I'll try to post more poems from now on!
Any feedback you have on this piece is great!
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Peer Review

It's intriguing. Death described here is rather unlike he is portrayed sometimes elsewhere - rather than vehement, he seems simply objective. The poem feels like a statement of fact.


I'd be interested in seeing you expand upon the idea of Death's Humble Inn - it isn't elaborated much on here.


Reviewer Comments

Definitely a piece I would be interested in seeing more of. Thanks for sharing ;)