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This piece is very original, and I love the way you created a new world for your story. Felix felt very real, and it makes me want to know what she'll do next. She has so much determination, and it's great to see a strong female character. Also, this story has a lot of conflicts in it, creating many opportunities for more chapters. :)
I'd like to know more about the history of Athehull and why it was overthrown. I think you could include some more details about Felix's family, as I said in some of my highlights. This would help us learn more about her and why she's in this situation. Why were the previous nobles overthrown? What happened to make them susceptible to bombing by the rebels? Were they all in ballrooms when they were bombed? If so, why is this? Did they really love dancing or something? Those are just some of the questions I thought of while I was reading it.
This was a great story, and you should totally post more of it! I'd love to know what happens next. Hopefully you don't mind all of my comments about punctuation and sentence structure, but those are only minor problems and can be fixed pretty quickly. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your story. Good job, and keep writing! :)