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When the author talks about the character's backstory and tells us how he meets his coworkers.
By telling us what Pete does. He works at a train station. I would want to know what the characters physically look like.
What Pete and his coworkers look like.
At a train station in Ireland. I think this author should add train sounds so it would bring the setting to life.
I think this story is good and it's nice you're talking about your favorite vehicles, trains!
Why did you use the name, Drew Barton? Did you write this story with him?