Peer Review by The Midnight One (Australia)

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some days I wish

By: twinkleprose


FREE WRITING

some days I wish
I wish I were a boy
so I can kiss
kiss a lovely girl

so that when
I take her home
my parents
won't glare

some days I wish
I wish I were a boy
so I could marry
a beautiful girl

so when I  kiss 
her on our wedding 
my parents will cry
tears of joy


Peer Review

I can appreciate the struggle behind this poem. I love the title also.


Would describing the said parents emotions a bit more make it more emotive?


Reviewer Comments

Love this poem, it's very lyrical.