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I think that the plot of this story was very well thought out. You have a good introduction and ending, and the middle parts fit in well with the rest of it. Also, the title is great. It pulls you in and makes you want to know why it's "Home of the Broken" instead of "Home of the Brave".
I'd really like to know more about the bugs. I think you could improve this story by describing them more and showing more of their impact. Why did they go after Elizabeth, and the rest of the character's family? Where did they come from? Why can't they kill the protagonist? How have they impacted the country and the world? I know you want to maintain an air of mystery around these bugs, but I think the story would be better if we knew at least a little more about them.
Great job with this story! It caught my attention and made me want to read the whole thing. I hope some of my comments are helpful for you. I guess you changed your entry in the novel writing contest to another piece, so hopefully this was the right one for me to review. Anyway, you're a great writer! Keep writing! :)