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Written By: elisa
November 8, 2019
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This piece is so beautifully raw and desperate. The way you accent and establish the rhythm does wonders to the piece. I believe it’s your word choice that gives all of us this realness and fear. The repetition of a few lines really further amplifies and showcases your thoughts and emotions. I realise how my comment seems to be sort of roundabout—which I apologise for—but really; this is absolutely phenomenal. Well done:)
okay, now I got the meaning of your message to the readers.
this is so good, it just embodies a ton of raw indescribable emotions and perfectly sums them up. great job! :)
Wowwowow that title - like damn it's just incredible!!! And the whole piece is just amazing. :)
writing about organs always hits different somehow. also, this made me think of the part in Girl, Interrupted where she thinks that she isn't a real person, nothing but skin, and tries to peel off her skin to see if she has any bones
dude this is really cool i love it! the title's my favorite part -- what an analogy
the title is amazing
ofc the rest is too but your titles always hit me and this one hit me HARD
I wanted to give it a like but I suppose you won't like it.
I want to know who is Judas. Ofcourse, I can google it but I really believe in the power of words. I kinda curious 'cause I'm tryna write a novel which will include urban legends, Hindu mythology and Christian mythology.
oh my god your title?? is godly?? when you say "like judas knew christ", gods, that's an analogy i'll never be able to match. the sheer, raw (i never could pick just one adjective) emotion thrumming through this piece has left me a little more whole than i was before i read it. have you been reading oscar's writing lately? because this sort of sound like him. and i love it. you're amazing.
I dont get the reference in the title, but this is a really powerful poem. the first and last lines are amazing.
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