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I think that the way you wrote this piece was very interesting and effective. For a long time, it was mysterious and hard to understand what was going on, but the fog cleared away in the ending, and the message stood out very well.
I'd like to know more about Rose and why she feels this way. What is the reason for her depression? What motivates her to keep trying? Do her family know about this, or does she convince them she's okay with her smiles? Other than that, I think it's good to keep this piece fairly dream-like, because it has a unique tone that's great.
There's just a few issues here with grammar and sentence structure, but those should be easy to fix, and I highlighted most of them. Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this piece. You're a great writer! Keep it up! :)