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what would you fix,what do like about my story
I wanna know more about how Ethan's mom got deported and also a good description of how he felt.
pretend as if one of your family members gotten deported and how you would feel the story would be more intriguing and descriptive
I think you should talk about how you felt during the time that Ethan's parents were arguing.
I would actually like to learn more about the background of Ethan like where he lives or how the slammed door heard like. If you can, try to add metaphors .
I like that you put where the you got home from school. which shows me that Ethan likes to play baseball.
copy your story into grammarly to help with your wording and a couple other little things like periods.