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Message to Readers
I hope you all enjoy reading this piece as much as i enjoyed writing it. Thank you.
This piece does not promote suicide or self-harm. They are just random thoughts fathomed in my head. Thank you.
The detailed description. This piece is so intensely described, you can actually see the pictured sliding in front of your eyes.
I loved the way you have created a mystery around the world of Aurum as I said above the details are phenomenon. The only thing I would like to suggest you to add some line in the first para. It is beautiful but instead of getting into Aurum's character, you can write about something else related to it. I hope you got what I meant.
All the best and keep writing this book. You're on right track.